请英语达人来改错!不胜感激

分值不重要啊！！帮人要紧！！
Future
Everyone had dreamed about his future
How about your future
I want to ask everybody present here,
How many of you had dreamed about your profession when your were young?
Maybe it was a doctor, or a lawyer in your dreams,
However, I want to ask, if you had changed your dreams
Change to a manager or a boss?
If you ask me of my dream
I want to be a millionaire
I believe everyone want to become a millionaire
But to be a millionaire proves to be target, other than a dream
It is a target that can come true gradually
In the near future
I will be leaving school
And become a member of this society
At that time I may only be working for a company as staff
But that is my first step
I do not expect it is paid well
But it is the experience that counts
I once worked as a telephone seller
Sales is the most difficult in every industry
Because it involves many aspects
However, the job is helpful
When facing my customers, what should I do?
Communication, guidance and introduction
These are essential to a seller
I believe that if you wish to be the best man, you must suffer the bitterest of the bitter
At present I agree that money is not everything,
The first is experience and handling the relationship between people
Everything is step by step
Of course payment is still important
Because of our dreams to become millionaires

Let us dream of our future
Design our future
Finally realize our dreams!!
Thank you for your attention.

累死我了

I want to ask how many people had dreamed your Job
to be a teacher a doctor Or a lawyer?
I would like to ask you what's Job you dream now
I believe everybody wants to be millionaires
I will leave school and towards society
But i think thats job is helpful to me
when i face my Customers I know What should i do
because all of us wants to be millionaires
看的眼睛酸死了,这是我能找出的,也不知道对不对,凭感觉的~~~附加一句:偶还只是高中生~~~~~英语水平是~~~~~烂的可以的,改错了不要见怪~~原谅拉

I want (to) ask How many people had ever (dreamed) your Job
I would like to ask what(')s Job you are (dreaming) now
那些DREAMS大都错了形式..

5分就值这么多
Because I want to be a millionaire..